Basically a bunch of guys staging a play at home, but it's a start.
OK, so first off, the voice acting, writing, dialogue and sound production seem like a bunch of high school or college friends got together to make a movie... and it shows. But - that's what Evil Dead was for Sam Raimi and look where he wound up,right?
I got so far as the baseball throw before I stopped. The previous segment where I was supposed to gather parts seemed broken. I could get two items within arm's reach but could not move around beyond my chaparone boundary to pick up the Nitrogen so I assume the game just moved along. Anyway, the initial scene was pretty cool and the concept was good. But it does have that "home movie" kind of quality.
Low-hanging fruit: Grab some free software like Audacity to process the voice recordings. Google how to add distortion so that the radio transmissions received by the main character sound like they're coming over the radio. That'd help a lot. Maybe add some breathing effects in the background so the player feels they are in a space suit. Try not to overdo it - make it subtle. And maybe flip the model of the dead astronaut with the MMU on his belly instead of the side, or on his belly at a slight angle. It looks a little to clean and perfect.
You could have a lot of fun with this - it's a cool concept. :) Think ambiant sound though - breathing in the spacesuit, radio distortion, the sound of wind or traffifc or birds in the scene throwing the baseballs to make the player feel they are in the location. You're obviously going for emotional impact here and sensory input is what makes that happen in VR.
